I like it but do not get my tip?

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I have close my eyes, I am now blind to your evil doings go forth and kill each other leave this dying world for ever more, so die and leave us in blistful peace. Heaven or Hell I hope we will meet then my dragon rage is you will see. BDE

As in his tip (like an offer of gratitude) is a bitter taste and cancer... Thanks for the comment...

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'A burnt child loves fire' - Oscar Wilde

oh I see thank, your welcome

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I have close my eyes, I am now blind to your evil doings go forth and kill each other leave this dying world for ever more, so die and leave us in blistful peace. Heaven or Hell I hope we will meet then my dragon rage is you will see. BDE

This a very deep poem...I love the way it's written. The despair he feels comes through clearly. I loved it. Congrats!

Thank you very much, I like to think of my self as deep, but who knows? I'm pleased you feel the emotion he does... I think I may record this one...

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'A burnt child loves fire' - Oscar Wilde

I would...

Yeah smoking is bad, and I like the way that is portrayed in this poem (It'll be about something completely different now, just goes to show how dead my brain is at the moment). The imagery is also very good. I like the use of powerful, harsh words such as "acrid", and "stench clings" is also a very effective phrase because it shows a sense of being trapped, and an inability to throw off the addiction to the drugs that have become his life. The bit referring to 'my tip' is also very good, though I'm unsure why the person is fulfilling the role of a waiter or of a salesperson for the addiction in this. Also, finishing on a positive, or so I hope, I like the use of the phrase "My head bowed so low" to show how down the person is, and how despondent the person has become because of their addictions.
Well, you wanted critique...

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If I'm to fall
Would you be there to applaud?
Or would you hide behind them all?
'Cause if I were to go
In my heart you'll grow
And that's where you belong.

Oasis

I don't think your brain is possible to be dead It's quite extraordinary

You picked up very well on the theme i was trying to capture, quite the eye you have

The line about the tip is pretty much saying that all he has to show for life is a bitter taste in his mouth and cancer (which of course is a metaphor)

I certianly did want critique and this is not lacking, thank you very much for your kind words and your honesty, it is much appreciated.

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'A burnt child loves fire' - Oscar Wilde

Ah, ok, got it now.
And you're welcome.

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If I'm to fall
Would you be there to applaud?
Or would you hide behind them all?
'Cause if I were to go
In my heart you'll grow
And that's where you belong.

Oasis