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Ripping At the Seams by ~Obsidian-Nightfall:iconObsidian-Nightfall:

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Ripping At the Seams

Sit beneath the willows green
As they silently weep into the serene
Hear the ballads of shattered dreams
This place echoes the quietest of screams
But life here is ripping at the seams
©2009 ~Obsidian-Nightfall
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Author's Comments

This can be interpreted in many ways I know, but I'm not going to give anything away just yet, I like to see what you all think :)

Thank you

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:iconthedownpour:
*TheDownpour Jul 1, 2009, 12:53:43 PM
Very well done. I especially love the third line, I may have to use that at some point, if you'll let me, that is.

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If I'm to fall
Would you be there to applaud?
Or would you hide behind them all?
'Cause if I were to go
In my heart you'll grow
And that's where you belong.

Oasis
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~Obsidian-Nightfall Jul 2, 2009, 7:10:52 AM
Thank you very much Adam, it really does mean a lot to me that you like this poem. Someone of your talent I mean...

You may of course use that line, it would be an honour. If you could link this poem when you do I would apprechiate it, hopefully more people can read my work then. I just want people to read my work, I am sure you can relate...

Thanks again ^^

--
'A burnt child loves fire' - Oscar Wilde
:iconthedownpour:
*TheDownpour Jul 2, 2009, 9:01:46 AM
If I do use it, then I certainly will give you a link. I'd do that anyway. You deserve credit for your own line

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If I'm to fall
Would you be there to applaud?
Or would you hide behind them all?
'Cause if I were to go
In my heart you'll grow
And that's where you belong.

Oasis
:iconobsidian-nightfall:
~Obsidian-Nightfall Jul 2, 2009, 10:35:57 AM
:) Thank you, you're a good person ^^

--
'A burnt child loves fire' - Oscar Wilde
:iconthedownpour:
*TheDownpour Jul 2, 2009, 11:36:52 AM
Thank you. So are you.

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If I'm to fall
Would you be there to applaud?
Or would you hide behind them all?
'Cause if I were to go
In my heart you'll grow
And that's where you belong.

Oasis
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~NotA1lTh3r3 Jul 5, 2009, 10:25:37 PM
It seems so depressing like the person cant take "It" anymore, it being what everis happening to them, makeing the very stressed and want to just fall apart and not be fixed....ya...it is very good though, short but good

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Let's set the town on fire and watch from the hill as all we know bursts into flames infront of our eyes. Leaving the shadow of the past behind us as we follow the rabbit down the rabbit hole into a whole different world where right is wrong.
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~Obsidian-Nightfall Jul 8, 2009, 8:14:14 AM
Thank you, there is a lot of, hmm how to put it suicidal tension i suppose in this poem, glad you noticed. Sometimes i think a message only needs a few lines to be told :)

--
'A burnt child loves fire' - Oscar Wilde
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~midnight-mysteries Jul 9, 2009, 2:15:14 AM
awesome..

--
"Search the shadows. All you'll find is a deeper darkness than before and within it a deeper yearning within yourself...
...my dear - have you ever heard the phrase 'curiosity killed the cat?' "
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~Obsidian-Nightfall Jul 9, 2009, 2:55:51 AM
Thank you

--
'A burnt child loves fire' - Oscar Wilde
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